(chapter 16)
If I got to talk to my main character, I would tell her to stay at the palace. Even though she still misses Aspen. She needs to under stand that he has moved on and so dose she. I would also ask her if she Maxon. I would also tell her that she needs to use, the fact that she can basically do anything she wants and get a way with it to her own advantage. If I were her I would definitely take him up on the offer to the freedom of going out side when ever.
I would say all this to her because I believe that she is not as grateful as she should be for all the presence has given. And all the privileges she is getting. Because if any other girl did every thing she has done. They would be gone for good. I also put in the fact that there is no chance with Aspen because, even if she did get put out of the selection competition she would still be automatically a 3 instead of a 5. It was bad enough that she was on cast above Aspen, but now she would be 3 cast levels above him! This is my reasoning for why I would say what I said.
You did have a few spelling errors that should have been fixed, but over all, you did great!
ReplyDeleteI totally agree with what you would say. America can do anything she wants and get away with it because people like her. She really has an advantage above everyone else because I think Maxon likes her the most. Therefore no matter what she does he won't kick her out.
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ReplyDeleteI agree on everything you said. America should stay. It would good for her and not be hooked on Aspen. Good job on adding detail.
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